CREATE A UTOPIAN SOCIETY!Please write a descriptive paragraph describing your own utopia!
What would it look like?
How would it feel to be a part of that society?
What are the rules of that society?
Please use vivid language that helps the reader create a mind movie of your perfect society!
Jacobville
ReplyDeleteMy city is in the middle of Las Vegas in its own section. My city is a utopia ran by the most handsome guy in town: Jacob. We have seven awesome pools, four movie theaters and five casinos. Everyone can wear any choice of clothes their style. As you walk down the main street, Jacobstreet, there will be girl dancers dancing in black and diamond dresses. As you get to the end of the street there will be thousands of food and jewelry booths filled with the hottest stuff in town. Did I mention that all the hotels are 5 star? There is only one rule, and that rule is to have fun. When you come to Jacobville we hope that you have a good time. To make reservations please call 111-333-Jacobville or go online to www.Jacobville.com.
Awesomeville!!
ReplyDeleteHey! Welcome to Awesomeville. It is very awesome here! It is everything you would ever want. There are big buildings everywhere! Everybody has a huge awesome house with 14 rooms, 15 bathrooms, and in every room of every house there is a golden chandelier covered in diamonds. On the streets candy shops and malls are on every corner. The streets are made of smooth stone. The sidewalks are always paved. It would be so cool to live here! The only jobs are the mall managers and store keepers. Also, the people that work in the candy shops!The most awesome thing is, Money grows on trees!!!
The rules are: You have to have fun at all times, you have to like sports and you can’t be dangerous in any way! Please come and see my utopia for yourself.
By Christina
Jacob,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a very good job on describing what it looks like and saying what is in the town!! I could definitely make a mind movie!! You don't need to improve on anything!! It's way better than mine!! Haha! Great job!
From,
Christina :)
Dear Chistina
ReplyDeleteI think that you did a good job with your language because you told us what the rooms looked like. I think that you can improve on maybe making more jobs for people. I think that your town is very cool, I wish I can go there.
-Jacob
Bailey’s Utopia
ReplyDeleteMy utopian society has 5 swimming pools on every street. It also has a very large ocean with warm water. It has 1 school on every street. There is a movie theatre in every house. There is winter here. The cars are 4-wheelers. It would feel great to be in this society because you get to hangout anywhere you want to. Also, you get to do whatever you want to. You get to do whatever you want when your swimming. The rules are: there is no spitting on the ground, no stealing and no robbing places. you should come here because it will make you like home!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
By Bailey hundredths
Monica’s Utopia
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1: You have to go to school.
2: You have to have a job.
3: You can’t get married until you are 19 years old.
4:There are no cops allowed.
5:You can’t have a boyfriend until the age of 16.
My utopian society looks and feels peaceful. The trees are bright green. There are no such things as drugs and smoking. You get to pick your own teachers in the grade you are in because they are all nice. There are 90 men and 100 women. The clouds are never black and always colorful. There are 30 houses. There are only cars and four wheelers for transportation. There are 60 hotels. Some people would want to live here because everbody is nice and never mean. Come and see my Utopia.
By: Monica:)
WTF
DeleteKunga
ReplyDeleteRules
The ten commandments will be my commandments.
The Nine B’s and One O
#1 Be rude
#2 Be smart
#3 Only 5 as population
#4 Be strong
#5 Be a sharp shooters
#6 Be able to see color
#7 Be able to have a job
#8 Be able to talk
#9 Be able to list all these rules
#10 Be able to do all or 9 out of 10 at ten years old
At Kunga the population is five because the rule of only five people was created until the population is 1 million and it was too high. Kunga has a large waterfall that flows out soda of all kinds. The streets are gold. The grass is gum. The dirt is chocolate. It’s always warm with a breeze. All the workers are robots. The people sleep, eat, and burp. You only can ride horses, 4-wheelers, trained anacondas, boats, and mine is a rocket powered 41 horse lambergini. The robots do everything from cleaning up to picking your nose. Food is free. The robots shoot people that don’t have number in his/her eye or break a rule. There is only one hut but it is a 20 story hut made of 100% silver. The island smells like roses and chocolate. The security is zombies the die after mission is complete and it’s not catchable. You can never die because you get an eternal shot.
It’ll be wonderful to live on Kunga because I can live in stile. I’ll be the luckiest man in the world. I will not want to move after I live there. I would be like a rare species because I will be the only boy there. It will be wonderful.
By Kenneth Stanhope
The Perfect Place
ReplyDeleteThe utopia that I would want would be like would still have school, but there would be a catch, you would have a longer recess, no homework, and no hard tests. You would think it looks like the middle of nowheres but once you get one glance of this place, you will want to stay there forever. you would see a water slide 1,000 feet tall and a pool that is 15 school buses deep and wide. It would be just off the coast of Dallas, Texas. There would bee 12 hotels that can hold 1,000,000 people and 1,000 stores tall and the most beautiful view of the sea you will ever see. Each one of them has a room that is the size of 15 football fields and everyone of them has a stadium and a different sport every 5 hours like football, soccer, tennis and baseball. you will love being here because the buildings are made with pure gold and crystal and only $20 per person to get in and stay as long as you want. The rules are simple no weapons, have a good time, and have fun. Also, if you break a serous rule like carry a gun, it will be taken and you will be shocked and kicked out never to return. also you will see no sidewalks and only grass that was people won’t get hurt as bad if they fall off their bikes or something like that. Also you can get whatever food you want for free. In conclusion, you should come here because it is fun for the whole family.
By
Matt
Hey kenny I think you did a good job on saying what your utopia is and i don't know what you mean on be able to do all or 9 out of 10 at ten years old.
ReplyDeletebailey, you did a good job on making a mind movie,
ReplyDeleteyou need to improve on re reading because your last sentence don't make sense.
:kenneth
Imagination
ReplyDeleteIn the middle of nowhere, there is an Island located in the Indian Ocean that nobody knows about. There are sandy beaches with the water as clean, shiny and clear as a Caribbean sea! Below the water there are beautiful neon colored coral reefs. Also, there are starfish resting on rocks below, sea turtles that grow as big as 6 ft in diameter and 5 ft long. There are also tuna and dolphins that jump out of the water doing flips and they wave to you. Palm trees arch over the sandy beaches providing shade. One proper and polite family was chosen to live here and they are called the Robinsons! This family can only wear Hawaiian clothes. Inside their huge house are many fascinating things. In every room there is a 102” flat-screen T.V, and each bed that they have is a water bed, filled with sea water. They have humongous hammocks that are connected to two palm trees in the shade, so when the slight breeze blows it will rock them to sleep. The family has two kids named Abbie and Leroy. Since the parents are educated, they teach there kids math, science, social studies and more. You would feel proud and grateful to live here. However, there are some rules: you have to be smart, so you know how to survive if you got lost. Another rule is that you cannot swim away. You also can’t have any phones because you might call someone to come get you, you can’t even use a cellphone because there is no signal. Also you can only have 1-2 kids. The last rule is that you have to know how to swim. This is my Utopia! Come visit my magical place.
~Meagan
Dear Jacob
ReplyDeleteI think that you did a very good job his entry because you said that you have dancers on the street called Jacob street.I think you can improve on making schools in your place.
By Your Friend Bailey...............
Ethan’s Town:
ReplyDeleteA Community That’s a Utopia
The rules in my community are: no killing, no stealing, no speeding and no littering. Also, every man must have five hot girlfriends. This town in very clean and nice. Everyone is nice to others. It would feel cool to be a part of this society because it is in the middle of the ocean and the only vehicles are boats. The roads are made out of water and the only way to cross the road is by a bridge above it. If you break any of the rules you get thrown into the water. This is the town on Ethan’s Town. You should come here because it is nice and you will have no troubles.
By Ethan
Dear Bailey:
ReplyDeleteI think you did a good job at making mind movies, because I can picture the pool. I think you could improve on describing the theatre. Because you could use a little more mind movies. Over all great job!
~Meagan
I THOUGHT IT WAS VERY COOL BUT I THINK IT WAS KIND OF WEIRD THAT NOBODY KNOWS ABOUT IT BECAUSE IF NO BODY KNOWS ABOUT IT NOBODY WOULD LIVE THERE
ReplyDeleteETHAN
Dear,Ethan you did a great job on telling us what your Utopia is. i think you should not say each man must have five hot GIRLFRIENDS.
ReplyDeleteby:monica
I am responding to Kenny's entry. I think you did a good job makeing it funny because haveing robot workers is funny. I think you could improve on having more houses or something because people won't want to go somewheres that only has one house.
ReplyDelete----Matt----
Robragesville
ReplyDeleteMy Utopian society looks like a bunch of houses all different. The houses are all built the way you want even a candy house for free. It is nice and roomy for everyone and 2 garages for lots of room. The ocean are always calm and full of non dangerous animals like dolphins and starfish.
Be part of Robragesville will make you feel safe. You will feel like nothing is wrong. You will feel like you love this town and you will never leave.
Here are my rules. No alcohol,No smoking,No danger, and no treating other people differently. Kids are not aloud to go to a different place until they are gavin permission.
This is why you should go to Robragesville.
By:Robert
Amazona
ReplyDeleteIn the middle of the Pacific there lies the is land of Amazona. There are hardly any males who live here. Mostly women live here, highly educated warrior women. The men are all in prison because the women believe that they will destroy the island. No man can be trusted, for they all will be in prison or their memory is wiped. It is a very beautiful place with plants and animals. Some you have never even seen! It also has a snowy volcano, sandy beaches, grassy plains and thick jungles. There is a city located in the middle. The houses are made brick and dried mud. There are stables and many other important things. You will see children that are made of sand, water and love. From birth these children are taught art, music, fighting techniques, math, gardening skills and other important skills. These women wear tunics, dresses and armor. The food is collected from another island every day. As soon as you plant a seed it grows up very fast. The food is collected and stored until dinner is made. There are two main sports: skiing and surfing. They have something like the Olympics once a year for free. All the things are free because they don’t use money.
The 9 Rules
Always try your best at everything you do.
All the accused shall have trial.
Never ever kill a fellow Amazonian.
When someone from the island dies all must wear black all day.
Never lie to your fellow Amazonians.
Always inform some one where you will go.
Never litter or waste any harmful things.
Always respect your elders, never beat on them.
Finally always respect the clean, magical utopia you live in.
Do you like the way this place sounds? If you do, you can join. You just have to be a girl and be smart. You should join!
By Juliette
dear Meagan
ReplyDeleteI THOUGHT IT WAS VERY COOL BUT I THINK IT WAS KIND OF WEIRD THAT NOBODY KNOWS ABOUT IT BECAUSE IF NO BODY KNOWS ABOUT IT NOBODY WOULD LIVE THERE
ETHAN
Amazona
ReplyDeleteIn the middle of the Pacific there lies the is land of Amazona. There are hardly any males who live here. Mostly women live here, highly educated warrior women. The men are all in prison because the women believe that they will destroy the island. No man can be trusted, for they all will be in prison or their memory is wiped. It is a very beautiful place with plants and animals. Some you have never even seen! It also has a snowy volcano, sandy beaches, grassy plains and thick jungles. There is a city located in the middle. The houses are made brick and dried mud. There are stables and many other important things. You will see children that are made of sand, water and love. From birth these children are taught art, music, fighting techniques, math, gardening skills and other important skills. These women wear tunics, dresses and armor. The food is collected from another island every day. As soon as you plant a seed it grows up very fast. The food is collected and stored until dinner is made. There are two main sports: skiing and surfing. They have something like the Olympics once a year for free. All the things are free because they don’t use money.
The 9 Rules
Always try your best at everything you do.
All the accused shall have trial.
Never ever kill a fellow Amazonian.
When someone from the island dies all must wear black all day.
Never lie to your fellow Amazonians.
Always inform some one where you will go.
Never litter or waste any harmful things.
Always respect your elders, never beat on them.
Finally always respect the clean, magical utopia you live in.
Do you like the way this place sounds? If you do, you can join. You just have to be a girl and be smart. You should join!
By Juliette
Christina I think you did a great job at describing you Utopia by saying stuff like there is a mall on every street. I do not think you can improve because you did great on everything by adding a lot of detail. keep up your good work
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John
ReplyDeleteMy Utopian Community
September 10th 2010
Candy Wonder land
My utopian society looks like this .I it is 10 miles long and 10 miles wide making 100 square miles. The waterfall is made of chocolate. Little hovering clouds are the only way of travel. The ground is made of coco beans. The ground is made of cotton candy. There is a health store that you ha`ve to go to every 5 hours for a health check. You have a home made of gold, diamond and crystal. There are 25 bathrooms in a single house. In the bathrooms there 2 skating rings, an arcade a fridge and a Tv with a remote.To protect the community there’s a solid see through dome over it. Here are the rules of the community. You can’t be really fat. no mouthing of to your leader John Ricky Boby tixs
Ashley’s Utopia
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1:you have to watch your animals
2:jobs-everyone has a job
3:a boyfriend when you are 17
4:get married when you are 18
5:go to school
6:you have a leash on your animals
My Utopia community would look like it has big buildings. This community in New York. It is loud with bright lights. It is big. There are 400 people there. There are a lot of animals there. There are three parks and eight beaches. There are six lakes and nine ponds. There are many big trees. The color of the trees are green and brown. There are four ducks in the ponds that are brown and white. There are eleven woods. There are ten barns. There are five stores. There are nine rabbits. The rabbits are white. It is hot there. The speed limit is 3o. You should come to Utopia because it is fun there.
By:Ashley
I am responding to Juliette entery. i think you did a good job following directing because you did it correct. but you can improve on checking you because you wrote some you.
ReplyDeletejohm
Dear Ethan
ReplyDeleteI think you did a good job on your community. because you did hard work.improve on your spelling you didn't spell some right.
by ashley
Dear Christina,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a very good job and I like how you had money growing off trees.You don't need any improving because it is just perfectly good.Keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Your Friend Bailey
Shawn
ReplyDelete10/8/10
GOLDEN ISLAND
My utopia looks like a big solid gold city. People ride speed bikes and kids are homeschool their own personal teacher. In my utopia, people either make speed bikes, work as personal teachers, mine for gold or build the buildings. In my utopia everybody is treated equally. Nobody ever feels left out and members of the community like living here. All they have to do is follow a few rules. The rules are: no bullying, no more than 5 members in a family, no bragging and no lying to the elders. You should come to my utopia because it is made of solid gold and you never feel left out.
By Shawn
Maria.P.
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September 10th 2010
Candy Land!
Hello, welcome to Maria’s Utopian Community. If you’re wondering my community is called Candy Land. It’s a thousand mile drive in the middle of Dreamville. The clouds are made of cotton candy,the sun is made of a lemon drop with carmel in the middle. The trees are made of Heresy chocolate the leaves are made of mint the apples are carmel or chocolate covered apples. The grass is gum. You pick a piece of gum (another piece grows) take off the wrapper and eat it. The water fall at the far end of the community is made of soda. To change the kind you press a button and it changes the kind. The soda NEVER runs out! As a matter of fact NOTHING ever runs out. But, if you want to get into the water fall and drink some soda you have to wear special goggles to protect your eyes. Every house has a pair of protective goggles in the cabinet. The cabinets are pure gold. There is a mud pit behind everybody’s house, it is made of hot chocolate. The dirt is coffee grains.(Only for the grown-ups though.) There is NO CARS! To get from one place to another you get into your bed and say fly. Then this an opening at the top of your house. Your bed flies out,reads your mind and flies to the place that you are thinking of. There is a health store on every road. You HAVE to go to the health store at least three times a day. Every time you go you have to get at least one thing. If you just moved in and the people are still building your house you can sleep outside. It only rains once a week to help the plants grow better. When it rains you can go into the store press a button next to the door and everything will fold into a bed. Now you can sleep in there when it rains. In the winter it snows vanilla ice-cream. In the fall all the leaves not only change color but they change flavor too. Everything is FREE! There is no money. You can just walk into the store take only what you need and leave. All the houses are made of pure gold. There are 32 bathrooms witch have 2 hot-tubs,1 pool,2 50 inch flat screen tv’s,a fridge,a table and ice-skating rink. Also in your house you will have 200 bedrooms and 90 chandeliers. The chandeliers are made of Rubies. Each person has an assigned bathroom, your bathroom will have your name printed on the top of the door in gold. If you invite a friend over they can use any other bathroom except the ones with the names on top. Also,in each house there is a work out room in each bedroom. You can wear any type of clothes you want to. If you break the following rules there are many consequences. They are: the first time you break the rules you get soap in your mouth for 5 hours. The next time yo break the rules you go without food for 10 days. The third time you break the rules you get kicked out of the land FOREVER! Here are the rules:
RULES
NO SWEARING
NEVER SAY YOU DON’T HAVE FUN
NO BEING MEAN
HAVE FUN
KNOCK BEFORE ENTERING A CLOSED DOOR
DO NOT GO INTO ANOTHER PERSON’S BATHROOM
DO NOT COPY OTHERS
NO SPEEDING
REPECT YOUR ELDERS
RESPECT ALL MATERIALS
ALL PEOPLE ARE ALLOUD
DO NOT PICK ON ANOTHER PERSON’S COLOR
Well I hope you like it here in Candy Land!
Created by:Maria
Poptropica Island
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Potropica Island: The most classy tropical island ever! Everywhere you look, there will be coconut trees, tiled or stoned buildings, and a beautiful view of the blue crystal clear ocean with colorful fishes, sea turtles, stingrays, starfish, dolphins, whales, coral and more! All of the tiled or stoned houses outline the whole island. The back porches have long columns with vines of flowers and green mint leaves wrapped around the columns. There are no hurricanes, no tornados and no mosquitos! If you get sick, the nicest maids will come to you and fluff your pillows, make you food, watch a movie with you and more to pamper you! School starts when you are four or five and ends of eighteen years of age. School has delicious cafeteria food and school is always entertaining! You graduate at the age of eighteen like most of the USA schools and go off to college. At Poptropica Island, there are many colleges to choose from. The school busses are nice and clean with white comfy seats as comfy as couches! The color of the bus is shiny ink black. All of the vehicles smell like vanilla, coconut and raspberries. In fact, all of the vehicles run on coconut milk. The farmers plant crops and the coconut trees for people to use for their vehicles. As a reward to the farmers for their hard work to the community, the Mayor gives the farmers a special kind of penny and they can plant it and it will grow into a tree with a bunch of dollar bills! In the wintertime, coconuts still grow since they are so important to the community. The ocean turns to ice and they sand turns rock hard. The sea creatures get moved to the aquarium. Once the ocean turns to ice, that is when hockey season starts. You can either play hockey or ice skate. Every other sport, such as soccer, softball, baseball, tennis, football and more, the children get on the super bus boat and travel across the ocean to other schools. The timing takes a half an hour to an hour and a half due to the magical coconut milk (grew in a secret garden) that makes the boat go super fast without the children feeling it or getting seasick. There as also a dance every Friday at the finest hall: The Town Hall of Poptropica Island.
Now let’s go over the rules of Poptropica Island. First of all, there is no smoking or doing drugs. If there is, you will get sent to prison for a few days until you are clean from the drugs and smoking. Second, there will be no cruelty of the animals or there will be consequences. Third, there will be no killing or any other type of crime. Hopefully, these rules will be respected.
When you are here, you will feel comfortable, safe and loved. You will feel comforted because all of the houses are beautiful and cozy and they are all different. You will feel safe because the people who commit crimes will be in jail. Lastly, you will feel loved because you will have friends, family, and pets (optional). As you can see, you will be very comfortable, safe and loved when you are at Poptropica Island.
If you are interested in this magnificent society, contact the Mayor at 1-800-123-4567. Or, you can go to the Poptropica Island Website: www.poptropicaislandinfo.org. Thanks!
By,
Jillian
I am responding to Julie's entry.
ReplyDeleteI think that you did a good job describing what the Utopia is like because it would be weird if the girls just send the dudes to jail for no reason!
I think you could improve on the mind movies to tell us what it looks like more because I didn't really get a mind movie in my mind when I read yours.
I also think you could write a different conclusion thingy.
~Jilly~
I am responding to John's entry.
ReplyDeleteI thionk you did a good job on makeing it sound cool because you can have a house made of candy. also, they might eat it after a while. I think you could improve on fixing spelling errors and not putting more than one space because there was a lot of errors. You did a good job all in all.
----Matt----
I always wondered what it might be like if we lived in a utopia society. There would have to be no transgression, it would be a lot more different and enhanced than our society. No one would be able to wheedle anyone no matter what. Once they become adults they would be assigned a job that job would be based on there aptitude. Everyone in the society must have adherence to the society no matter what there ideas are about the society. Everyone would be treated with respect and will have the right to do what they want; nobody will be forced to do anything they don’t choose to do. In the community there will be no pollution and no violence though. Every thing you do must be palpable. In the end I hope this will be a prominent society.
ReplyDeleteI have this as an assignment in class we are in groups of four and our utopia is on an island with a population of 12,000 people and 600-700 acres but that's only as far as we've gotten because we only started today
ReplyDeletemy utopia is in the sky, (pacific) uses futuristic and steam punk culture and has a populaton of 3 billon. the first ruler (prime almighty) is h'aruk-al wqa'rizku. the utopia s called uqwuraki. (Mayan, tribal, Egyptian, Japanese,Thai,and other ancient societies/civilizations combined to create this utopia. [thanks suckers!!!!!!]
ReplyDeletenote: im raj. this has also the code of nalu'qua:
ReplyDelete1.kill the ones against state's cause.
2.its DO GOOD.
My city is called pleasant
ReplyDeletepopulation: the entire world population
everyone only eats vegetables.
animals are in a separate area and are able to sustain themselves without been abused and mistreated.
we all work for what we need.. if its food.. shelter or clothing.
water is provided to us from rivers or oceans and the water is drinkable.
transportation is through bicycles.
money is exchangeable .. and barely needed.
everyone is happy, loving and at peace within each other and with everyone else.
In Utopia, every citizen is equal. There are no haves and have-nots. There is plenty for everyone. Mechanical devices replace humans in all aspects of life and work, leaving people to pursue more worldly goals. Women are not allowed to get fat and ugly, and men can fuck whoever they want. Cats are not allowed, and anyone found in possession of one is executed along with the cat. Dogs are OK, and so are hamsters.
ReplyDeleteIs this like a school project? If so, cool, guys. Very cool.
ReplyDeletemy utopia is a world of asians thank you
ReplyDeleteEPIC
DeleteGG
DeleteMy utopia would be beautiful. There would be no racism and sexism-everyone would be accepted for who they were and only who they were. The scenery would be beautiful. Everywhere you look there would be at least one source of nature. A tree, a patch of flowers, grasses...anything. There would be police forces who cared nothing more than about your safety and would put their life's on the line for you. There would be no school, and children wouldn't misbehave. Elderly people can have fun too! They don't have wheelchairs...they have flying purple unicorns!. There are no cars, so there's no way to pollute the area. People travel by foot, transport,and, or, jets That's how my utopia would be like.
ReplyDeleteMy utopian society would be a foreign place. On top of hill, cliff or mountain, looking down on to a body of water of sorts. The houses would all be very architecturally simple, open, a sort of asian concept. Everyone would accept what's different. Everyone would have a very lively garden with the most fertile soil we could possibly make. It would be an independent place, people would be taught about geography, if they didn't like it there they could leave whenever they liked. Education would be free of charge, the goals of the society would be simple: Health, Evolution, Comfortability, Productivity, Freedom and Happiness. If anyone had questions or disagreements, they wouldn't be kicked out or punished, their opinion would be thoroughly considered and the population would come to a consensus. Everyone would be encouraged to engage in artistic expression. Sports wouldn't be a part of the populations life because it's best that the population is able to express their natural sense of competition through a game, and taught that competition is good if it's perceived to better the individual or team and not in the sense that it would lessen the opponent. Rules would essentially be reason and respect, sympathy and empathy. Everyone would feel at peace and relaxed.
ReplyDelete-Reilly :D
every one is a girl only (must be 18 or older)
DeleteHI GUYS
ReplyDeleteMY UTOPIA IS BETTER
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